The table illustrates how the proportion of male and female workers in four sectors changed between 1990 and 2010.

Overall, the percentages of females were higher than that of males across the board, except for manufacturing the only field bucking the trend.

Concerning Retail/Shop employment, the proportion of male workers remained stable at 13% during 20 years, contrary to a slightly decreasing trend in female counterpart in same field, with number falling inconsiderably from 20% to 18%.

When it comes to Health, the research documented a insignificant growth from 7% to 9% in male job-holders, bearing a resemblance to a steady growth from 9% to 11% in female workers working in health related jobs.

Regarding males in manufacturing industry, most of them (30%) worked in this industry in 1990, but the figure decreased gradually in the following twenty years, approaching 10% in 2010, exactly one-third of itself at the beginning. A similar downward trend could be seen in the number of female workers in the same field, with figure going down to 3% in 2010, nearly one-eighth as much as it was at 17% in 1990.

As for those working in Tourism, there was a climb from 7% to 10% in male workers, consistent with a similar rise from 23% to 25% in female counterparts. 

The table compares changes in the proportions of male and female workers across four employment sectors between 1990 and 2010.

Overall, women accounted for a higher percentage of the workforce in most sectors throughout the period, with manufacturing being the only exception where men predominated. In general, employment in manufacturing declined sharply for both genders, whereas the remaining sectors experienced either stability or moderate growth.

In the Retail/Shop sector, the proportion of male employees remained unchanged at 13% over the 20-year period. By contrast, the figure for female workers showed a slight decline, falling marginally from 20% in 1990 to 18% in 2010.

Turning to Health, male employment rose modestly from 7% to 9%, mirroring a similar increase among females, whose participation grew steadily from 9% to 11% over the same timeframe.

By contrast, Manufacturing witnessed a pronounced downward trend. In 1990, 30% of male workers were employed in this sector; however, this figure dropped dramatically to 10% by 2010. A comparable but more substantial decline was observed among female workers, whose share fell from 17% to just 3%, representing almost an eightfold reduction.

❌ Hạn chế

• Overview chưa thật sự sắc nét, còn hơi mơ hồ:
  across the board dùng chưa chuẩn vì vẫn có ngoại lệ.
  Một số nhận xét chưa thật chính xác hoặc diễn đạt rối (đặc biệt phần manufacturing).

• Dùng liên từ chưa tự nhiên hoặc sai collocation:
  ❌ contrary to → ✔ in contrast to
  Một số câu quá dài, nối bằng dấu phẩy gây rối.
  Lặp cấu trúc và cách diễn đạt.

• Nhiều collocation không tự nhiên hoặc sai:
  ❌ bucking the trend (dùng hơi gượng trong Task 1)
  ❌ a insignificant growth → ✔ an insignificant increase
  ❌ female counterpart in same field
  Lặp từ figure, number.

• Mạo từ & giới từ:
  ❌ during 20 years → ✔ over a 20-year period
  Số nhiều/số ít & chia từ:
  ❌ the percentages of females were higher than that of males
  Dùng sai từ loại:
  ❌ a insignificant → ✔ an insignificant

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✔ Task Achievement

Overview rõ ràng, nêu 2 xu hướng chính.
So sánh hợp lý giữa giới tính & ngành nghề.

✔ Coherence & Cohesion

• Bố cục logic, mỗi đoạn một ngành.
  Liên từ học thuật, không gượng.

✔ Lexical Resource

• Từ vựng học thuật chuẩn Task 1:
  accounted for, predominated, witnessed a pronounced downward trend
  Không lạm dụng từ khó.

✔ Grammar

• Câu phức tự nhiên, ít lỗi.
  Dùng chuẩn mạo từ, thì, giới từ.